crew hand sweeping the workday back in the bay

12 Responses

  1. Lynne Says:

    Oh I like the way this rolls out very much.

  2. Meik Blöttenberger Says:

    Lynn, I appreciate your comment on my haiku. Growing up along the banks of the Chesapeake Bay, I witnessed this moment many times. It saddens me because many of the watermen are leaving the water, because of the poor condition of the bay.

  3. haikuapprentice Says:

    Another wonderful thing about Tinywords is the opportunity to travel in verse, all around the world. I begin to better appreciate the wonderment of Basho's first readers of Narrow Road to the Deep North as I read this verse by Meik Blöttenberger.

    Of course, we have the advantage of the Internet and Wikipedia to immediately supplement our knowledge of places we hear about, so reading some articles about the cultural decline of Chesapeake Bay, and depletion of its seafood resources, adds a sense of poignancy when I reread this ku by Meik. In that bare flat line I get a sense of the sun setting over the horizon, and over the watermens' way of life; and in the back and forth of my eyes, parsing the verse, searching out the different readings, I actually recreate the swabbing broom of the crew hand.
    Subtle and very effective poetry.

    This morning I actually awoke in a motel room in a fishing town I am visiting for work.

    broadened horizon
    sunrise glimpsed through
    motel door peekhole


  4. Properties Istanbul Says:

    i agree with you

  5. Julie Warther Says:

    Beautiful, Meik! It takes me to another place. So many senses come into play in this one brief line.

  6. Minhtus Says:

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  7. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    A highly effective observation of a normal workday for the crew hand. Great capture of movement in a few words.


  8. Tash Adams Says:

    The single line creates multiple readings/meanings. Artfully done!

  9. Alan Summers Says:

    crew hand sweeping the workday back in the bay

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    Alan Summers
    Ekphrastic response to an installation by artist Fairley Barnes

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  12. Properties Turkey Says:

    The single line creates multiple readings/meanings. Artfully done!

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