Well done! I readily identify with the feeling. I like the inclusion of the carousel image as well, as it reflects in a sidewise way our town's festival experience (the Dentzel carousel put up each year at the Wooden Boat Festival).
Wonderful poetry Sally. And I really love how the form of the verse actually embodies the content and the experience being conveyed – each of the five lines can be read almost as a rack of the carousel, with their own pictures and partial portrayal of the town. Brilliant stuff!
Your tanka really spoke to me, Sally. I live in a coastal town in Northern Ireland and whenever anyone sees a photo or painting from here they often gasp at the scenery. I took it for granted until I moved back after living elsewhere for almost two decades and only saw it through the eyes of others on my return.
What a true thought. Oftentimes we have to "see ourself as others see us", to re-accquaint ourselves with that which has become familiar–
"I see my town
as a tourist"
April 6th, 2016 at 9:57 am
Excellent!!
April 6th, 2016 at 11:32 am
I like the imagery contained in the verse and the fresh perspective one can gain by looking at your everyday environment from a new perspective.
Well done!
April 6th, 2016 at 12:10 pm
Seeing with "beginners mind" or fresh eyes…how a wonderful idea and image in this lovely poem.
April 6th, 2016 at 12:22 pm
What fun this haiku is. Imagine spinning to find a postcard and there's your town. Thanks, Mary.
April 6th, 2016 at 12:53 pm
I like it.
April 6th, 2016 at 4:16 pm
Well done! I readily identify with the feeling. I like the inclusion of the carousel image as well, as it reflects in a sidewise way our town's festival experience (the Dentzel carousel put up each year at the Wooden Boat Festival).
April 6th, 2016 at 6:05 pm
Lovely tanka!
April 6th, 2016 at 6:53 pm
Thank you for your comments, everyone!
April 8th, 2016 at 5:50 pm
Wonderful poetry Sally. And I really love how the form of the verse actually embodies the content and the experience being conveyed – each of the five lines can be read almost as a rack of the carousel, with their own pictures and partial portrayal of the town. Brilliant stuff!
Strider
April 13th, 2016 at 5:34 am
Your tanka really spoke to me, Sally. I live in a coastal town in Northern Ireland and whenever anyone sees a photo or painting from here they often gasp at the scenery. I took it for granted until I moved back after living elsewhere for almost two decades and only saw it through the eyes of others on my return.
An effective poem.
marion
May 28th, 2016 at 9:45 pm
What a true thought. Oftentimes we have to "see ourself as others see us", to re-accquaint ourselves with that which has become familiar–
"I see my town
as a tourist"