Well observed Mike! You've captured that sudden silence (and heightened sense of hearing) which comes after a sudden thunderclap. And I really like how you use the structure of your haiku to aesthetic effect – the verse begins traditionally with 5 – 7 syllables, then the final line is a single word, but that word is onomatopoeic, and resonates long afterward, like the guitar strings themselves. Great stuff! Thank you for sharing this.
Wow! This is awesome. An effective juxtaposition and well described. Every word is just the right word & no extra or too few words. Precise & perfect :)
April 20th, 2016 at 11:51 am
Nice
April 20th, 2016 at 1:23 pm
Well observed Mike! You've captured that sudden silence (and heightened sense of hearing) which comes after a sudden thunderclap. And I really like how you use the structure of your haiku to aesthetic effect – the verse begins traditionally with 5 – 7 syllables, then the final line is a single word, but that word is onomatopoeic, and resonates long afterward, like the guitar strings themselves. Great stuff! Thank you for sharing this.
Strider
April 20th, 2016 at 5:41 pm
Thanks!
April 20th, 2016 at 7:19 pm
Wow! This is awesome. An effective juxtaposition and well described. Every word is just the right word & no extra or too few words. Precise & perfect :)