lightning then thunder
the steel strings of the guitar
hum
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Mike Andrelczyk
Mike Andrelczyk is currently living in Strasburg, Pa. Also lived in Los Angeles, Ca. and Lewes, De. He likes writing haiku about the ocean, potatoes, moons, plants - mostly little things except the ocean which is huge, and the moon which looks little but isn't. Poems and fiction have been featured in Modern Haiku, Haiku 2015 (Modern Haiku Press), A New Resonance 8 (Red Moon Press), The Inquisitive Eater, The Bitchin' Kitsch. Follow him on Twitter @MikeAndrelczyk.
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Nice
Well observed Mike! You've captured that sudden silence (and heightened sense of hearing) which comes after a sudden thunderclap. And I really like how you use the structure of your haiku to aesthetic effect – the verse begins traditionally with 5 – 7 syllables, then the final line is a single word, but that word is onomatopoeic, and resonates long afterward, like the guitar strings themselves. Great stuff! Thank you for sharing this.
Strider
Thanks!
Wow! This is awesome. An effective juxtaposition and well described. Every word is just the right word & no extra or too few words. Precise & perfect :)