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Neat play on words from wondering/thinking if there's a risk of a bear coming across. you or vice versa, to the mental bear actually crossing your mind.
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Black Mountains–
the stagnant chill
of snowmelt
Alan Summers
From the Japan Times live renku event (June 2002)
Anthology: Haiku Friends (ed. Masaharu Hirata, Japan 2003)
Collection: Does Fish-God Know (YTBN Press 2012)
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This is beautiful haiku Dave. A bear crossing your "path" could have brought no freshness to your haiku, since it is already within the expectation of the reader. And the bear rather crossing your "mind" instead was a smart twist! And I need not forget to mention the tinge of humor which comes with it.
Well understood, Dave, a nifty thought!
__ We may sense hazards, yet continue along life's pathway, well aware and ready to face or avoid the challenges that threaten our chosen foot-way. _m
December 14th, 2017 at 9:19 am
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mountain trail …
a bear crosses
my mind
—DAVE READ
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Neat play on words from wondering/thinking if there's a risk of a bear coming across. you or vice versa, to the mental bear actually crossing your mind.
.
Black Mountains–
the stagnant chill
of snowmelt
Alan Summers
From the Japan Times live renku event (June 2002)
Anthology: Haiku Friends (ed. Masaharu Hirata, Japan 2003)
Collection: Does Fish-God Know (YTBN Press 2012)
.
December 14th, 2017 at 9:57 am
This is beautiful haiku Dave. A bear crossing your "path" could have brought no freshness to your haiku, since it is already within the expectation of the reader. And the bear rather crossing your "mind" instead was a smart twist! And I need not forget to mention the tinge of humor which comes with it.
December 14th, 2017 at 10:05 am
That has always been a fear of mine, always on my mind when hiking. You captured the mental state so well.
December 14th, 2017 at 11:24 am
Well understood, Dave, a nifty thought!
__ We may sense hazards, yet continue along life's pathway, well aware and ready to face or avoid the challenges that threaten our chosen foot-way. _m
December 14th, 2017 at 9:01 pm
Thanks everyone!
December 14th, 2017 at 9:37 pm
Well Done Dave
December 15th, 2017 at 9:04 am
loved how simple and profound it is, yep, salut!
December 17th, 2017 at 2:49 am
Love this! Seven words to capture what everyone feels when walking in bear country. Nice one, Dave.
December 17th, 2017 at 7:09 am
mountain trail …
a bear crosses
my mind
Good one David
February 28th, 2018 at 10:01 pm
I like this very much, awesome David