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Neat play on words from wondering/thinking if there's a risk of a bear coming across. you or vice versa, to the mental bear actually crossing your mind.
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Black Mountains–
the stagnant chill
of snowmelt
Alan Summers
From the Japan Times live renku event (June 2002)
Anthology: Haiku Friends (ed. Masaharu Hirata, Japan 2003)
Collection: Does Fish-God Know (YTBN Press 2012)
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This is beautiful haiku Dave. A bear crossing your "path" could have brought no freshness to your haiku, since it is already within the expectation of the reader. And the bear rather crossing your "mind" instead was a smart twist! And I need not forget to mention the tinge of humor which comes with it.
Well understood, Dave, a nifty thought!
__ We may sense hazards, yet continue along life's pathway, well aware and ready to face or avoid the challenges that threaten our chosen foot-way. _m
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mountain trail …
a bear crosses
my mind
—DAVE READ
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Neat play on words from wondering/thinking if there's a risk of a bear coming across. you or vice versa, to the mental bear actually crossing your mind.
.
Black Mountains–
the stagnant chill
of snowmelt
Alan Summers
From the Japan Times live renku event (June 2002)
Anthology: Haiku Friends (ed. Masaharu Hirata, Japan 2003)
Collection: Does Fish-God Know (YTBN Press 2012)
.
This is beautiful haiku Dave. A bear crossing your "path" could have brought no freshness to your haiku, since it is already within the expectation of the reader. And the bear rather crossing your "mind" instead was a smart twist! And I need not forget to mention the tinge of humor which comes with it.
That has always been a fear of mine, always on my mind when hiking. You captured the mental state so well.
Well understood, Dave, a nifty thought!
__ We may sense hazards, yet continue along life's pathway, well aware and ready to face or avoid the challenges that threaten our chosen foot-way. _m
Thanks everyone!
Well Done Dave
loved how simple and profound it is, yep, salut!
Love this! Seven words to capture what everyone feels when walking in bear country. Nice one, Dave.
mountain trail …
a bear crosses
my mind
Good one David
I like this very much, awesome David