Mike, it isn't a haiku. It is a tanka and a good one. http://www.tankasocietyofamerica.org/ Please visit the Tanka Society of America's website where you will find much information and many more fine examples of the form which is much older that haiku.
A deep reminder of how powerful our sense of smell can be in bringing us into the present. Scent is often overlooked in both poetry and life in this age. This tanka reminds me of the many moments that scent has made me feel more alive. Beautiful.
March 29th, 2018 at 11:09 am
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with each deep breath
I find more of myself
in this world
the scent of rose petals
after the rain
—CHRISTINA SNG
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Wonderful! That scent after rain, love it!
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I'm changing
for the last time
just like the heron
shifting from river bank
to river bank
Alan Summers
The Right Touch of Sun
Tanka Society of America
Members's Anthology 2017
ed. Margaret Dornaus & David Terelinck
March 29th, 2018 at 4:44 pm
Lovely meditative tanka
crushed lavender
more of my grandmother
in each breath
March 31st, 2018 at 7:46 pm
As I have read, a fine tanka Christina; as inspired, my humble uncertified parallel. _m
tree branch
searching buds touch the stars
in this darkness
the owls' harmony
calls new leaves
April 4th, 2018 at 7:23 am
Elegant tanka, Christina. Beautifully harmonised with L3 as pivot line ((kakekatoba) and with gentle expression (koto shikarubeki).
close to the lips
over a cup of coffee
winter rain
gently pours warmth
of long memories
Pravat Kumar Padhy
Publication Credit: Tanka Poets on Site
April 11th, 2018 at 6:32 am
Ahhhh beautiful!
marion
April 18th, 2018 at 8:20 am
CNG,
Would work better as two haiku:
the scent
of rose petals
after the rain
{Five-line haiku are very cumbersome
& awkward!}
April 18th, 2018 at 8:59 am
Mike, it isn't a haiku. It is a tanka and a good one. http://www.tankasocietyofamerica.org/ Please visit the Tanka Society of America's website where you will find much information and many more fine examples of the form which is much older that haiku.
April 18th, 2018 at 8:33 am
This could be one of my all time favorites. It speaks deeply to me. Thank you.
April 18th, 2018 at 8:43 am
Beautiful Christina. The moment so vivid and felt. Like experience that feels familiar and revisited. Tingling with feeling.
One can imagine a litany of moments with the scents of different flowers in our life.
April 18th, 2018 at 1:03 pm
Very nicely written.
April 18th, 2018 at 1:46 pm
Deeply touched by your tanka.
April 20th, 2018 at 8:36 am
A deep reminder of how powerful our sense of smell can be in bringing us into the present. Scent is often overlooked in both poetry and life in this age. This tanka reminds me of the many moments that scent has made me feel more alive. Beautiful.