commuting to work the iambs of trains
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Alan S. Bridges
Alan S. Bridges began writing haiku in 2008 after a chance meeting with poet John Stevenson, Managing Editor of The Heron's Nest, on a cross-America train trip. Alan especially likes train and fishing haiku, and is assembling haiku for a book. Alan's haiku have been published widely and he won the 2013 Irish Haiku Society International Haiku Competition. In 2014 he was named a judge of the Haiku Society of America Gerald Brady Senryu Contest and won an honorable mention for the 25th ITO EN Oi Ocha New Haiku Contest-- His haiku will appear on ITO EN bottles of green tea later in 2015. Also in 2015, Alan won first prize for the Kaji Aso Studio International Haiku Contest. View all posts by Alan S. Bridges
Accurate observing.
May I add a seasonal touch?
commuting to work
the iambs of trains
in spring rains
I found the “iamb of trains” very beautiful…thanks for sharing..
Anitha
I love this!
A beautiful monoku. The word phrase 'iambs of trains' is unique and fresh. The haiku reflects the busy life of a common man.
floating clouds birds fly the other way
Pravat Kumar Padhy
Publication Credit: brass bell: a haiku journal, July 2014
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commuting to work the iambs of trains
—ALAN S. BRIDGES
Wonderful use of a technical poetry term of stressed and unstressed syllables capturing the movement of a train. And perhaps the stressed (and unstressed) syllables of conversations that commuters make.
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sun off stubble a train in its landscape
Alan Summers
otata 4 (April, 2016) ed. John Martone
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And of course the monoku sounds just like a train when read aloud!
Simply brilliant, Alan.
marion