All night the rattle at the iron gate the color of winter
—Sylvia Forges-Ryan
Issue 18.1 | 3 May 2018
This is lovely – the sound in the phrase feeds the last line so well. Cold, brittle, but beauty too.
Very nice.
__ You've enticed my imagination into this instant senryu, an echo to your apposite haiku; sleep awakened… those squeaky, rustful hinges. _m
moonlight steps to latch the fence gate rusty hinge
Love the synesthesia in this haiku!
Lovely! …so wonderful how you've used synesthesia with 'the color of winter' to bring us color, sound, and for me taste as well when I envision a cold winter night.
Colour and sound… The synesthesia employed very well is interesting..enjoyed this.
Beautiful ku.
coalfield fire– the winter morning thickens its colour
Pravat Kumar Padhy Publication Credit: Autumn Moon Haiku Journal, Vol. 1:1, Fall-Winter 2017
Wonderful work.
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May 3rd, 2018 at 9:43 am
This is lovely – the sound in the phrase feeds the last line so well. Cold, brittle, but beauty too.
May 3rd, 2018 at 11:48 am
Very nice.
May 3rd, 2018 at 1:01 pm
__ You've enticed my imagination into this instant senryu, an echo to your apposite haiku; sleep awakened… those squeaky, rustful hinges. _m
moonlight steps
to latch the fence gate
rusty hinge
May 3rd, 2018 at 2:25 pm
Love the synesthesia in this haiku!
May 3rd, 2018 at 2:27 pm
Lovely! …so wonderful how you've used synesthesia with 'the color of winter' to bring us color, sound, and for me taste as well when I envision a cold winter night.
May 4th, 2018 at 3:07 pm
Colour and sound… The synesthesia employed very well is interesting..enjoyed this.
May 4th, 2018 at 9:41 pm
Beautiful ku.
coalfield fire–
the winter morning
thickens its colour
Pravat Kumar Padhy
Publication Credit: Autumn Moon Haiku Journal, Vol. 1:1, Fall-Winter 2017
May 8th, 2018 at 6:47 am
Wonderful work.