All night the rattle
at the iron gate
the color of winter

8 Responses

  1. Lynne Rees Says:

    This is lovely – the sound in the phrase feeds the last line so well. Cold, brittle, but beauty too.

  2. Connie Says:

    Very nice.

  3. Magyar Says:

    __ You've enticed my imagination into this instant senryu, an echo to your apposite haiku; sleep awakened… those squeaky, rustful hinges. _m

    moonlight steps
    to latch the fence gate
    rusty hinge

  4. Alexa Selph Says:

    Love the synesthesia in this haiku!

  5. Carole MacRury Says:

    Lovely! …so wonderful how you've used synesthesia with 'the color of winter' to bring us color, sound, and for me taste as well when I envision a cold winter night.

  6. Anitha Varma Says:

    Colour and sound… The synesthesia employed very well is interesting..enjoyed this.

  7. Pravat Says:

    Beautiful ku.

    coalfield fire–
    the winter morning
    thickens its colour

    Pravat Kumar Padhy
    Publication Credit: Autumn Moon Haiku Journal, Vol. 1:1, Fall-Winter 2017

  8. Norman Darlington Says:

    Wonderful work.

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