All night the rattle
at the iron gate
the color of winter
Issue 18.1 | 3 May 2018
This is lovely – the sound in the phrase feeds the last line so well. Cold, brittle, but beauty too.
__ You've enticed my imagination into this instant senryu, an echo to your apposite haiku; sleep awakened… those squeaky, rustful hinges. _m
to latch the fence gate
Love the synesthesia in this haiku!
Lovely! …so wonderful how you've used synesthesia with 'the color of winter' to bring us color, sound, and for me taste as well when I envision a cold winter night.
Colour and sound… The synesthesia employed very well is interesting..enjoyed this.
the winter morning
thickens its colour
Pravat Kumar Padhy
Publication Credit: Autumn Moon Haiku Journal, Vol. 1:1, Fall-Winter 2017
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