I remember literally testing a cattle fence as a very young teenager, and there is something about the connection, and being in mixed gender company. Very original but very accurate comparison!
I wrote a book review/article for Blithe Spirit (journal for the British Haiku Society) on this collection by current BHS President Kate Hall, posted onto my area 17 blog entitled:
"Portable words: The other side of the electric fence – Kate Hall's haiku collection "Irises""
Love it. I agree with Mark Dailey completely … the humour is just the tip of the iceberg here … so much going on underneath, all the fear and excitement, the tentative daring inherent in the charged and changing body during puberty. What better symbol than the electric fence!
December 3rd, 2018 at 8:26 am
You know a senryu is successful when you immediately and involuntarily laugh out loud. Well done (!), and more layered than it might first appear.
December 3rd, 2018 at 8:27 am
Fascinating!
puberty
we take turns touching
the electric fence
—DAVE BONTA
I remember literally testing a cattle fence as a very young teenager, and there is something about the connection, and being in mixed gender company. Very original but very accurate comparison!
I wrote a book review/article for Blithe Spirit (journal for the British Haiku Society) on this collection by current BHS President Kate Hall, posted onto my area 17 blog entitled:
"Portable words: The other side of the electric fence – Kate Hall's haiku collection "Irises""
I'll have to re-read it now! :-)
December 3rd, 2018 at 9:06 am
What a perfectly jolting juxtaposition to allude to the shocks of adolescence! So fresh and cutting edge!
I especially like the unspoken nod to that invincibility we once felt in our youth…Well done! Autumn
December 3rd, 2018 at 10:07 am
Great, sharp.
December 3rd, 2018 at 5:09 pm
Big grin!
December 3rd, 2018 at 5:11 pm
Love it. I agree with Mark Dailey completely … the humour is just the tip of the iceberg here … so much going on underneath, all the fear and excitement, the tentative daring inherent in the charged and changing body during puberty. What better symbol than the electric fence!
March 14th, 2019 at 7:40 am
between the bed wrinkles winter shadows