Yes – dominate and dominion together are brilliant. "Lost dominion of birds" is unforgettable. Grief for our planet. A wonderful poem, Mr. Read.
Jim Ellis
Auburn/NY/US
forest fire smoke
dominates the sky —
the lost
dominion
of birds
—DAVE READ
Nature reminding humans who really has the power and control, and humans continuing the slaughter directly and indirectly of its fellow animal species.
Wow! I love the musicality, timeliness, and the way "dominates" and "dominion" look alike but feel opposite.
Beautiful tanka with the expression of emotion and grief (ushin tei).
tender trees–
the wrath of fire
burns everything
transferring the forest
to shapeless smoke
Pravat Kumar Padhy
Red Lights, Vol.7, Issue.2, June 2011
shaded forest
the trees
preserved us
Yes – dominate and dominion together are brilliant. "Lost dominion of birds" is unforgettable. Grief for our planet. A wonderful poem, Mr. Read.
Jim Ellis
Auburn/NY/US
forest fire smoke
dominates the sky —
the lost
dominion
of birds
—DAVE READ
Nature reminding humans who really has the power and control, and humans continuing the slaughter directly and indirectly of its fellow animal species.
A gently powerful tanka.