monsoons begin with each day's rains
the hills turn greener greener
Originally appeared in beyond the horizon beyond (Vishwakarma Publications 2017)
Issue 18.2 | 23 January 2019
The repetition of 'greener greener' — such anticipation! This is just one of the jewels in your book.
Thanks Marie Shimane…
So very happy you like this zip.
Thanks also for remembering by book – beyond the horizon beyond
Thank you so much, Marie
__Grand again Kala, and I thank you, as it and you have prompted this instant's echo_! Nature's given tools and their essence, that gift of rain. _m
green sings this sound of life
So very happy to read your comment and your response ku.
Sorry, I don’t get it or like it at all!
pining in its nest
for parents 🦅
I sure like your honesty and yes, zip haiku (the late John Carley's creation) is about pauses and what is does to the image.
It's a two-line ku and with 15 sound units.
To quote John, "The 'zip' is just a style of prosody. What matters most of course is the artistic sensibility brought to the writing of haiku"
There must be no end to how green the hills become!
Very correctly observed …
I share this hill with Pune University and the city is best during monsoons …
Thanks for your comment.
Anticipation is a perfect word.
The green hills in Kala's poem, reveals not only beauty, but a necessity to feed crops and animals that in turn feed us, and the wonderful senses within her poem, feeds the poetic soul.
Thanks a ton, Carol
Oh, I love this zip, Kala! The repetition of 'greener' is inspired. :)
Thanks a lot, Marion
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