monsoons begin   with each day's rains
    the hills turn greener   greener

 

 

Originally appeared in beyond the horizon beyond (Vishwakarma Publications 2017)


10 Responses

  1. Marie Shimane Says:

    The repetition of 'greener greener' — such anticipation! This is just one of the jewels in your book.

  2. kalaramesh Says:

    Thank you so much, Marie
    _()_

  3. Magyar Says:

    __Grand again Kala, and I thank you, as it and you have prompted this instant's echo_! Nature's given tools and their essence, that gift of rain. _m

    seasons rain
    green sings this sound of life
    natures gift

  4. kalaramesh Says:

    Thanks Magyar.
    So very happy to read your comment and your response ku.
    _()_

  5. Mike Schoenburg Says:

    Sorry, I don’t get it or like it at all!

    heron hatchling

    pining in its nest

    for parents 🦅

  6. kalaramesh Says:

    I sure like your honesty and yes, zip haiku (the late John Carley's creation) is about pauses and what is does to the image.

    It's a two-line ku and with 15 sound units.
    To quote John, "The 'zip' is just a style of prosody. What matters most of course is the artistic sensibility brought to the writing of haiku"

  7. Sheila Sondik Says:

    There must be no end to how green the hills become!

  8. kalaramesh Says:

    Yes, Sheila,
    Very correctly observed …
    I share this hill with Pune University and the city is best during monsoons …
    Thanks for your comment.

  9. Carol Says:

    Anticipation is a perfect word.
    The green hills in Kala's poem, reveals not only beauty, but a necessity to feed crops and animals that in turn feed us, and the wonderful senses within her poem, feeds the poetic soul.

  10. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Oh, I love this zip, Kala! The repetition of 'greener' is inspired. :)

    marion

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