change of trains a busker hurries through the minute waltz
—Garry Eaton
Issue 18.2 | 30 January 2019
I love the movement (the way the lines end in a monosyllable following the two-syllable words in "busker hurries" and "minute") in this is a haiku that I wish I had written!
Thanks for your appreciative comment, Gaby!
Nice one. Made me smile.
Thanks for commenting Bob.
__ Gary, you've reminded me of my last subway ride on a train left this Boston subway-stop; my 'Park Street Station' echo, to your verse. _m
park street this soft music overcomes cold sense screeches an outgoing train rails harmonize
Thanks Magyar. ‘rails harmonize’ is a nice idea!
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January 30th, 2019 at 9:08 am
I love the movement (the way the lines end in a monosyllable following the two-syllable words in "busker hurries" and "minute") in this is a haiku that I wish I had written!
January 30th, 2019 at 10:10 am
Thanks for your appreciative comment, Gaby!
January 30th, 2019 at 12:08 pm
Nice one. Made me smile.
January 30th, 2019 at 5:37 pm
Thanks for commenting Bob.
January 31st, 2019 at 9:24 am
__ Gary, you've reminded me of my last subway ride on a train left this Boston subway-stop; my 'Park Street Station' echo, to your verse. _m
park street
this soft music overcomes
cold sense
screeches an outgoing train
rails harmonize
January 31st, 2019 at 10:48 am
Thanks Magyar. ‘rails harmonize’ is a nice idea!