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overcast sky
the census taker asks
if I live alone
—JOANNE MORCOM
Just like background music can make a neutral set (room, street etc…) go from funny, romantic, to tease and scary, so does the opening line. In my childhood hometown of Bristol we had a guy called John Cannan always presentable and with a smart suit who was responsible for many crimes and received three life sentences. I remember searching for him too. So it makes me wonder if it was just an innocent question important for the census, or was he gathering his own information too?
Deeply unnerving haikai verse, and of course I wonder if it's penned to test the reader and their attitude. A finely craft poem and incredibly thought provoking.
Thank you for your responses.
Alan, your story about nasty John is unsettling!
Yes, I was trying to write a haiku with a Hitchcock-like undertone, and hopefully I achieved it.
Caught out by the simplicity, it took until the third knock (reading) for Joanne’s wonderful haiku to hit home. Alan’s insightful gatherings added to,by Joanne revealing the poems intent made for a trilogy of attacks on the senses.
Nicely done Joanne.
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my god in Hitchcock
is it just ?
people don’t see
November 8th, 2019 at 12:58 pm
Ominous evocation of the one and the many.
November 8th, 2019 at 1:46 pm
.
overcast sky
the census taker asks
if I live alone
—JOANNE MORCOM
Just like background music can make a neutral set (room, street etc…) go from funny, romantic, to tease and scary, so does the opening line. In my childhood hometown of Bristol we had a guy called John Cannan always presentable and with a smart suit who was responsible for many crimes and received three life sentences. I remember searching for him too. So it makes me wonder if it was just an innocent question important for the census, or was he gathering his own information too?
Deeply unnerving haikai verse, and of course I wonder if it's penned to test the reader and their attitude. A finely craft poem and incredibly thought provoking.
Alan
November 8th, 2019 at 5:34 pm
Wonderful!
November 8th, 2019 at 8:15 pm
Thank you for your responses.
Alan, your story about nasty John is unsettling!
Yes, I was trying to write a haiku with a Hitchcock-like undertone, and hopefully I achieved it.
Cheers,
Joanne
November 9th, 2019 at 2:07 am
You did, very successfully! :-)
warmest regards,
Alan
November 8th, 2019 at 9:34 pm
Caught out by the simplicity, it took until the third knock (reading) for Joanne’s wonderful haiku to hit home. Alan’s insightful gatherings added to,by Joanne revealing the poems intent made for a trilogy of attacks on the senses.
Nicely done Joanne.
.
my god in Hitchcock
is it just ?
people don’t see
November 9th, 2019 at 6:09 am
Nice
state of lonesome
makes an opportunity…
November 9th, 2019 at 8:09 pm
Terrific! And I agree it rewards with rereads.
November 10th, 2019 at 10:52 am
small fog
in my hand
a snowflake melts