Love that phrase over the first two lines. I guess the last line is both 'literal' as Fall takes over from Summer, and that this is the last day of September, as it leaves, and October takes over.
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As September is my birthday month and wedding anniversary, it's sad to see it go, but still enjoying presents into October, just like your leaves, and 'leaving'.
Beautiful haiku.
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This was an unexpected treat as the European Robin, I realised, was privately giving a sub-song, not quite the same as whisper song, that you might be more familiar with?
As I'd already written a sub-song haiku (with the British Blackbird) I left that out, but some UK birders might guess. :-)
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this small ache and all the rain too robinsong
Alan Summers
First publication credit: Modern Haiku vol. 44.1 winter/ spring 2013
Anthology credit: naad anunaad: an anthology of contemporary international haiku ed. Shloka Shankar, Sanjuktaa Asopa, Kala Ramesh, India, 2016
October 5th, 2020 at 10:25 am
a sad song
on repeat
September leaves
—RICH SCHILLING
Love that phrase over the first two lines. I guess the last line is both 'literal' as Fall takes over from Summer, and that this is the last day of September, as it leaves, and October takes over.
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As September is my birthday month and wedding anniversary, it's sad to see it go, but still enjoying presents into October, just like your leaves, and 'leaving'.
Beautiful haiku.
.
This was an unexpected treat as the European Robin, I realised, was privately giving a sub-song, not quite the same as whisper song, that you might be more familiar with?
As I'd already written a sub-song haiku (with the British Blackbird) I left that out, but some UK birders might guess. :-)
.
this small ache and all the rain too robinsong
Alan Summers
First publication credit: Modern Haiku vol. 44.1 winter/ spring 2013
Anthology credit: naad anunaad: an anthology of contemporary international haiku ed. Shloka Shankar, Sanjuktaa Asopa, Kala Ramesh, India, 2016
October 8th, 2020 at 12:20 am
Wow, really nice haiku and I like the way Alan fleshes it out and adds his one line song.
forest river
a ghost moth meanders
with the moon