Such a lovely drawn out feel to this as the train passes and the dog's bark fades, as we leave the haiku. and we're left alone in the dark and silence with the memory, and probably more memories. So rich. Really beautiful.
I am a sucker for train haiku, and I rarely hear or see dogs at the moment, but two rescued Lurchers are heading over for a quick visit over Christmas, for a winter walk. They will have me on a leash, of course.
The last line is incredibly atmospheric, capturing both film and television experiences of iconic train adventures to my own travelling through Europe during and post-Cold War!
The word midnight always conjures up multiple images, thoughts, senses, and feelings, and a dog in the night, plus the freight train, makes for an incredible adventure of a haiku, thank you!
I can't manage trains and dogs but what about Paris, snow, and a really good 'long' cup of coffee?
café longueur
a Parisian train station
invents snow
Alan Summers
Presence #68 (November 2020)
and
a dog all smiles
can't wait to say hello
we talk secretly
Alan Summers
Weird Laburnum ed. Michael O’Brien (September 2019)
From "The Letter D is Missing" (a muri-bun)
From the “Surrealism as Truth series” in association with “the dogs of name.”
Thank you very much for your thoughts and your own train haiku, Alan. As a life-long train commuter I have to say they hold a special place in my heart as well.
December 3rd, 2020 at 10:30 am
Wonderful! I can hear it . . . Thank you . . .
December 5th, 2020 at 1:03 pm
Thank you for your kind comment, Marilyn.
December 3rd, 2020 at 4:06 pm
This is really wonderful. Thank you.
December 5th, 2020 at 1:03 pm
I'm glad you've enjoyed it, June!
December 4th, 2020 at 2:04 am
Such a lovely drawn out feel to this as the train passes and the dog's bark fades, as we leave the haiku. and we're left alone in the dark and silence with the memory, and probably more memories. So rich. Really beautiful.
December 5th, 2020 at 1:03 pm
Thank you for your thoughts, Lynne. I'm glad you enjoy the haiku.
December 4th, 2020 at 2:58 am
.
midnight
a dog barks
the freight train’s length
—MICHAEL BAEYENS
I am a sucker for train haiku, and I rarely hear or see dogs at the moment, but two rescued Lurchers are heading over for a quick visit over Christmas, for a winter walk. They will have me on a leash, of course.
The last line is incredibly atmospheric, capturing both film and television experiences of iconic train adventures to my own travelling through Europe during and post-Cold War!
The word midnight always conjures up multiple images, thoughts, senses, and feelings, and a dog in the night, plus the freight train, makes for an incredible adventure of a haiku, thank you!
I can't manage trains and dogs but what about Paris, snow, and a really good 'long' cup of coffee?
café longueur
a Parisian train station
invents snow
Alan Summers
Presence #68 (November 2020)
and
a dog all smiles
can't wait to say hello
we talk secretly
Alan Summers
Weird Laburnum ed. Michael O’Brien (September 2019)
From "The Letter D is Missing" (a muri-bun)
From the “Surrealism as Truth series” in association with “the dogs of name.”
December 5th, 2020 at 1:05 pm
Thank you very much for your thoughts and your own train haiku, Alan. As a life-long train commuter I have to say they hold a special place in my heart as well.