I’m beside myself I love this haiku so much. Love the conventional first two lines, the tension between the last two lines'”sharing”/”spiked,” how the monosyllabic last five words crush the lavish first three words, the way “punch” has a non-“party” meaning, the assonance of “spiked” and “lies.”
May 1st, 2024 at 9:41 am
Kathryn, such a POWERFUL, relatable haiku. SO well done!
May 1st, 2024 at 10:01 am
I’m beside myself I love this haiku so much. Love the conventional first two lines, the tension between the last two lines'”sharing”/”spiked,” how the monosyllabic last five words crush the lavish first three words, the way “punch” has a non-“party” meaning, the assonance of “spiked” and “lies.”
May 1st, 2024 at 10:06 am
Ouch!
Often true, unfortunately
May 1st, 2024 at 10:18 am
I’m going to a colleague’s retirement party next week. I may have to share this!
May 1st, 2024 at 10:54 am
Brilliant poem.
May 18th, 2024 at 1:45 am
Any drink that’s spiked is not good news, but one “spiked with lies” packs a stronger punch!
Well done, Kathryn.
marion