wild peppermint
a dock leaf shadow
clings to the bee
Alan Summers
Publications credits: The Basho Museum Memorial Anthology (2001)
Award credit: Commended, The Basho Museum Memorial Anthology, Ueno, Japan 2001
This haiku seemed to have a spiritual quality to me, in that "bee still" reminded me of " Be still and know that I am God…"
and we as "the fallen"…anyway, I liked the overall sense of grace.
Thanks so much for all your beautiful responses here… thanks to tinywords… and to each of the sensitive interpretations… the poem came from the experience of seeing the jacarandas fallen on the path at Caltech…… and the bee (s) still coming and sipping them. I as astonished, as I had never seen or thought of this…but of course, just fallen the sweetness has not dried up, I love Merrill's "his last words…" answer… yes that overtone is there, and the answer so resonant. Thank you Alan, I "love the "wild peppermint" as echo, shadow response…thank you Lisa… for "the sense of grace" you felt in it. Thank Matt… for slipping the jacarandas into your pond… I'm happy the haiku resonates because the original experience … so unforgettable.
October 4th, 2012 at 9:54 am
Enjoyed this one!
wild peppermint
a dock leaf shadow
clings to the bee
Alan Summers
Publications credits: The Basho Museum Memorial Anthology (2001)
Award credit: Commended, The Basho Museum Memorial Anthology, Ueno, Japan 2001
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October 4th, 2012 at 11:59 am
A lovely response. Thank you.
October 4th, 2012 at 11:45 am
his last words
full of sweetness
October 4th, 2012 at 12:00 pm
I liked this very much. Especially poignant as a response.
October 4th, 2012 at 1:19 pm
This haiku seemed to have a spiritual quality to me, in that "bee still" reminded me of " Be still and know that I am God…"
and we as "the fallen"…anyway, I liked the overall sense of grace.
October 4th, 2012 at 1:24 pm
That one went right in. Very nice
October 4th, 2012 at 5:07 pm
Beautiful!
October 11th, 2012 at 8:01 pm
Thanks so much for all your beautiful responses here… thanks to tinywords… and to each of the sensitive interpretations… the poem came from the experience of seeing the jacarandas fallen on the path at Caltech…… and the bee (s) still coming and sipping them. I as astonished, as I had never seen or thought of this…but of course, just fallen the sweetness has not dried up, I love Merrill's "his last words…" answer… yes that overtone is there, and the answer so resonant. Thank you Alan, I "love the "wild peppermint" as echo, shadow response…thank you Lisa… for "the sense of grace" you felt in it. Thank Matt… for slipping the jacarandas into your pond… I'm happy the haiku resonates because the original experience … so unforgettable.
November 11th, 2016 at 7:02 pm
That’s a shrewd answer to a tricky queoitsn