after the monsoon a light rain apology
—Sondra J. Byrnes
Issue 16.2 | 12 December 2016
This one is lovely.
This one is lovely. Software says I have already submitted this, but of course I have not.
The only way I could get this to submit was to add the extra comment, so you may actually have more people trying to comment than are getting through.
Neat Sondra_! __ In complement, I leave this echo; flip-flops left on the terrace were blown away by the monsoon, time to think:
morning coffee the night storm stole my flip-flops another cup
_m
Just so. Well done. Jan
oh yes, I like this lots! thank you
I liked your juxtaposition very much.
. Wonderful use of enjambment, breaking the lines:
—SONDRA BYRNES
I love how I can read and misread to my heart's content with those last two lines:
a light rain apology
Love it! Highly original and fresh.
Alan
Great! I love how I can read and misread to my heart's content with those last two lines
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December 12th, 2016 at 12:22 pm
This one is lovely.
December 12th, 2016 at 12:23 pm
This one is lovely. Software says I have already submitted this, but of course I have not.
December 12th, 2016 at 12:25 pm
The only way I could get this to submit was to add the extra comment, so you may actually have more people trying to comment than are getting through.
December 12th, 2016 at 3:30 pm
Neat Sondra_!
__ In complement, I leave this echo; flip-flops left on the terrace were blown away by the monsoon, time to think:
morning coffee
the night storm stole my flip-flops
another cup
_m
December 12th, 2016 at 3:33 pm
Just so.
Well done.
Jan
December 12th, 2016 at 8:13 pm
oh yes, I like this lots! thank you
December 12th, 2016 at 9:06 pm
I liked your juxtaposition very much.
December 13th, 2016 at 7:50 am
.
Wonderful use of enjambment, breaking the lines:
after the monsoon
a light rain
apology
—SONDRA BYRNES
I love how I can read and misread to my heart's content with those last two lines:
a light rain apology
Love it! Highly original and fresh.
Alan
April 17th, 2017 at 2:25 am
Great! I love how I can read and misread to my heart's content with those last two lines