The great thing about this poem is that you don’t have to be from Venice to appreciate the humor of the haiku. The nonchalance of birds paying no attention to the flexing and the bulging going on around them. They just do what birds do naturally. Cheers
Thank you, Michelle! I have a haibun "about" Venice in the next issue of Modern Haiku…this haiku was originally part of that haibun, but didn't work for the editor. It also benefited from the wise editing of the folks at tinywords who wisely advised a cut of two extraneous words…
Nicely sensed, Bill, and I thank you for… this generated echo_!
__ On the Cape Cod coast: We watch the gulls glide and search for a spot to safely beach themselves, beyond (as they see us) that annoying crowd of strange creatures. Smiles_m.
October 4th, 2017 at 10:00 pm
The great thing about this poem is that you don’t have to be from Venice to appreciate the humor of the haiku. The nonchalance of birds paying no attention to the flexing and the bulging going on around them. They just do what birds do naturally. Cheers
October 16th, 2017 at 12:48 pm
Thank you, Michelle! I have a haibun "about" Venice in the next issue of Modern Haiku…this haiku was originally part of that haibun, but didn't work for the editor. It also benefited from the wise editing of the folks at tinywords who wisely advised a cut of two extraneous words…
October 5th, 2017 at 5:26 am
Wonderful images.
October 16th, 2017 at 12:48 pm
Thank you, Dawn! Warmly, Bill
October 5th, 2017 at 8:25 am
Nicely sensed, Bill, and I thank you for… this generated echo_!
__ On the Cape Cod coast: We watch the gulls glide and search for a spot to safely beach themselves, beyond (as they see us) that annoying crowd of strange creatures. Smiles_m.
wings set
gulls flag the onshore winds
scanners
October 16th, 2017 at 12:48 pm
Thank you, Magyar! Enjoyed your response…
October 5th, 2017 at 1:57 pm
it is really that much simple ?
October 22nd, 2017 at 10:52 am
Ha! I like the humour in this one. :)
marion
November 20th, 2017 at 4:39 am
Muscle Beach
the effortless lift
of terns
—BILL GOTTLIEB
Ah, birds doing the impossible with no effort, and earth dwellers all shiny and sweating. :-)
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skuas in from smog
pause in their reflection
the tide washed beach
Huntingdon Beach, Los Angeles (California, USA)
Alan Summers
Publication credits: Haiku Spirit (1996)