Brad Bennett has published four collections of haiku with Red Moon Press: a drop of pond, a turn in the river, a box of feathers, and a rush of doves. He is also the author of a few words in the right order: essays on haiku craft, also published by Red Moon Press.
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Hosai Ozaki (1885-1926)
Translation from "Technique used in Modern Japanese Haiku"
Vocabulary and Structure, Ban’ya NATSUISHI (2015)
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Unusually I started this haiku with a preposition:
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in the river reflection
he watches himself
watch the sunset
Alan Summers
Haiku Enlightenment, Gabriel Rosenstock Cambridge Scholars Publishing (2009) ISBN (10): 1-4438-0521-1, ISBN (13): 978-1-4438-0521-6;
Page 54: There is a relaxed feeling of lightness – karumi – in the above haiku, employing everyday syntax and easily recognised imagery. Karumi became Basho’s ideal in the final phase of his development.
Gabriel Rosenstock
Haiku Enlightenment Gabriel Rosenstock
This was a particularly lonely time, and just my reflection kept company.
Alan
Cambridge Scholars Publishing (2009) ISBN (10): 1-4438-0521-1, ISBN (13): 978-1-4438-0521-6
Like your minnow reference!
the tadpole
swims away
a frog ?
Interesting haiku, Brad. The poem depicts the sublime sense of loneliness with brevity. Here are some of my haiku on loneliness:
clatters of sparrow–
someone still with my
loneliness
Chrysanthemum 13, 2013
*****
loneliness–
temple bell fills
the vacuum
A Hundred Gourds, 2:3 June 2013
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wild flower–
I breathe my
loneliness
The Heron’s Nest, Vol.XVI, No.4 December 2014
*****
Nice Brad.
__ As I see this, minnows are drawn to that lonely ring, and "read" that ring to find results. _m
a spatter
this ring on Fresh Pond
fish read.
Nature as solace. Very nice, Brad.
marion
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loneliness…
my spit draws
more minnows
—BRAD BENNETT
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This resonated with me so strongly!
It also reminds me of Hosai Ozaki
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seki o shite mo hitori
Coughing, even:
alone
Hosai Ozaki (1885-1926)
Translation from "Technique used in Modern Japanese Haiku"
Vocabulary and Structure, Ban’ya NATSUISHI (2015)
.
Unusually I started this haiku with a preposition:
.
in the river reflection
he watches himself
watch the sunset
Alan Summers
Haiku Enlightenment, Gabriel Rosenstock Cambridge Scholars Publishing (2009) ISBN (10): 1-4438-0521-1, ISBN (13): 978-1-4438-0521-6;
Page 54: There is a relaxed feeling of lightness – karumi – in the above haiku, employing everyday syntax and easily recognised imagery. Karumi became Basho’s ideal in the final phase of his development.
Gabriel Rosenstock
Haiku Enlightenment Gabriel Rosenstock
This was a particularly lonely time, and just my reflection kept company.
Alan
Cambridge Scholars Publishing (2009) ISBN (10): 1-4438-0521-1, ISBN (13): 978-1-4438-0521-6