As someone who has enjoyed eating seaweed (kelp) etc… in Wales and Japan, and mussels being a very British thing, and Belgian, I loved that last line! I'm surprised that nowadays the ocean didn't serve up a plastic plate or container of some sort too! :-)
the ocean
was in a rage last night
but today
these peace offerings
of blue mussels and kelp
—DEBBIE STRANGE
Beautifully crafted/composed tanka.
Tanka are not really as easy as they look when composed by someone like you. There's not a word out place, and each line break serves a purpose. If I want to, I can take another layer of meaning for myself, a gift from a strong writer who is also generous. Thank you!
May 14th, 2019 at 10:48 am
Nice.
May 14th, 2019 at 10:51 am
Super cute and creative.
May 14th, 2019 at 11:41 am
her bad mood
changes overnight
atlantic
May 14th, 2019 at 2:34 pm
and the barnacle infested mast
from an ancient sailing ship
May 14th, 2019 at 3:49 pm
Lovely.
after the surge
wafting ocean ozone
I love this
May 14th, 2019 at 5:53 pm
Gorgeous depiction of the power of the ocean and a mirror to the tidal push-pull of human emotion. Love it.
May 15th, 2019 at 5:20 am
As someone who has enjoyed eating seaweed (kelp) etc… in Wales and Japan, and mussels being a very British thing, and Belgian, I loved that last line! I'm surprised that nowadays the ocean didn't serve up a plastic plate or container of some sort too! :-)
the ocean
was in a rage last night
but today
these peace offerings
of blue mussels and kelp
—DEBBIE STRANGE
Beautifully crafted/composed tanka.
Tanka are not really as easy as they look when composed by someone like you. There's not a word out place, and each line break serves a purpose. If I want to, I can take another layer of meaning for myself, a gift from a strong writer who is also generous. Thank you!
Alan
June 27th, 2019 at 10:11 am
Thank you for always taking the time to leave such lovely comments, Alan!
June 27th, 2019 at 10:13 am
Thank you all for taking the time to comment, and for your lovely response poems!