humpback whale! for a split-second the sky steps back
(Originally published in Presence Haiku Journal #76, July 2023)
—Kala Ramesh
Issue 24.1 | 25 April 2024
Impressive verse! Entirely evokes the moment.
🙇🏻♂️
Kala. the transformation of the viewer, sky, whale–all one. A vivid description of Zoka, and your response by writing the haiku.
Jo
So so wonderful! I could see it!
Wonderful expansive and thrilling haiku!
Thanks, Mike, I’m happy this ku evokes the moment for you.
Thanks a lot, Mary. Nice to read what you’ve said: the transformation of the viewer, sky, whale–all one.
Thanks a ton, Debbie.
Dear Mary, Mike and Debbie,
Thanks a lot for your positive comments. I felt good.
The exclamation point works so well here to capture the sense of amazement and creates that “split second” of thrill. The haiku takes us there. Congrats!
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April 25th, 2024 at 9:50 am
Impressive verse! Entirely evokes the moment.
🙇🏻♂️
April 25th, 2024 at 10:20 am
Kala.
the transformation of the viewer, sky, whale–all one. A vivid description of Zoka, and your response by writing the haiku.
Jo
April 25th, 2024 at 12:30 pm
So so wonderful! I could see it!
April 25th, 2024 at 12:54 pm
Wonderful expansive and thrilling haiku!
April 25th, 2024 at 2:53 pm
Thanks, Mike,
I’m happy this ku evokes the moment for you.
April 25th, 2024 at 2:55 pm
Thanks a lot, Mary.
Nice to read what you’ve said: the transformation of the viewer, sky, whale–all one.
April 25th, 2024 at 2:56 pm
Thanks a ton, Debbie.
April 25th, 2024 at 6:35 pm
Dear Mary, Mike and Debbie,
Thanks a lot for your positive comments.
I felt good.
April 26th, 2024 at 6:27 am
The exclamation point works so well here to capture the sense of amazement and creates that “split second” of thrill. The haiku takes us there. Congrats!