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recession rising from the factory stacks five small black
October 11th, 2010 at 2:15 am
unpredictable
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the banker consoles himself
October 11th, 2010 at 9:20 am
Lovely, this is a wonderful poem, Ed! – Raquel Bailey
October 11th, 2010 at 9:47 am
You've done it again, Ed. Great visual!!
October 11th, 2010 at 9:51 am
Great topical poem! The concrete aspect of the five birds in flight is perfect. Too bad it doesn't come through in the emailed version.
October 11th, 2010 at 10:37 am
Fabulous concrete haiku. Thanks for sharing, Ed. – C2
October 11th, 2010 at 10:57 am
Good current concrete poem/haiku! ;-)
Alan, With Words
October 11th, 2010 at 1:19 pm
Ed! I loved this poem whatever form it is. Great imagination, feel free to send some of your works to me-I run 4 poetry websites. Michael Lee Johnson, Itasca, IL. http://poetryman.mysite.com/ promomanusa@gmail.com.
October 12th, 2010 at 1:01 am
Hi Ed – wonderful haiku.
October 12th, 2010 at 1:29 pm
Great haiku! It's visually stunning .with a depressing theme. You and David Lean.
October 12th, 2010 at 1:30 pm
unpredictable
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the banker consoles himself
October 17th, 2010 at 2:48 pm
recession blues….
Echoes of a
suburban dream
bounce off a forest
of
foreclosure signs.
August 11th, 2020 at 11:53 am
I really like this and the imagery is really good.-Sam Sutlive.