in
an old car
an old man and
an old dog


8 Responses

  1. Andrea Says:

    Well done! I really like the use and the repetition of "old"

  2. nhyde Says:

    Great one, David! The repetition rhythmically and visually really works here.

  3. jdbrush Says:

    I like the way this makes everything seem older than what came before.

  4. daveserjeant Says:

    Thank you for the feedback everyone!

  5. @Jon_Summers Says:

    Loved this one!

  6. daveserjeant Says:

    Thanks Jon!

  7. gergely lászló Says:

    ősöreg batárban
    öregúr
    vén kutyával

  8. daveserjeant Says:

    Thank you for the Hungarian tranlsation Gergely!

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