Hidden by the fog,
mockingbirds and wrens sing maps
outlining the trees.


13 Responses

  1. Carolyn Says:

    I love the picture this paints in my mind. Thank you.

  2. Dave Bonta Says:

    Good one, James!

  3. Frances Ruth Harris Says:

    Yes~! This fluid image lives and moves with satisfying mystery. We understand the fog. We have had our own fogs. And for those of us who enjoy the layers of fog we are sometimes given in our natural wild worlds, this is home. Thank you.

  4. gergely lászló Says:

    térképvázlat a ködből
    őkőrszem- és poszátaének
    jelzi a fák helyét

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  6. Alison Says:

    Maps for them and maps for us. What a wonderful haiku! Thank you.

  7. Deb Says:

    Love the idea of singing maps. Beautiful!

  8. poetrymanusa Says:

    James, very clever haiku and even in pattern 5-7-5, congrats! Michael Lee Johnson, poet IL.

  9. mark Says:

    enjoyed the metaphor – often outlawed in haiku mags! – Mark

  10. James Says:

    Thanks for the kind comments, everyone.

  11. Alan Summers Says:

    Nice haiku with natural 5-7-5 form rather than forced syntax and hanging participles etc…

    BTW no haiku magazine would outlaw metaphor as many haiku often become metaphoric by default. ;-)

  12. d. f. tweney Says:

    Good point, Alan! It is true that most haiku publications shun overt metaphor, and this is more metaphorical than most haiku. But I like it because the imagery is so vivid.

  13. Frankie Says:

    Chicos muchas gracias por los co!ietarnos!!m! Como nos queréis y nosotros a vosotros más aun!!! Nos vemos en el gran día, qué ganas tengo de veros a todos cuando llegue a la iglesia vestida de princesa!!!! Besazos!!!! Jejee!!

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