Hidden by the fog,
mockingbirds and wrens sing maps
outlining the trees.
Issue 10.1 | 25 June 2010
I love the picture this paints in my mind. Thank you.
Good one, James!
Yes~! This fluid image lives and moves with satisfying mystery. We understand the fog. We have had our own fogs. And for those of us who enjoy the layers of fog we are sometimes given in our natural wild worlds, this is home. Thank you.
térképvázlat a ködből
őkőrszem- és poszátaének
jelzi a fák helyét
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Maps for them and maps for us. What a wonderful haiku! Thank you.
Love the idea of singing maps. Beautiful!
James, very clever haiku and even in pattern 5-7-5, congrats! Michael Lee Johnson, poet IL.
enjoyed the metaphor – often outlawed in haiku mags! – Mark
Thanks for the kind comments, everyone.
Nice haiku with natural 5-7-5 form rather than forced syntax and hanging participles etc…
BTW no haiku magazine would outlaw metaphor as many haiku often become metaphoric by default. ;-)
Good point, Alan! It is true that most haiku publications shun overt metaphor, and this is more metaphorical than most haiku. But I like it because the imagery is so vivid.
Chicos muchas gracias por los co!ietarnos!!m! Como nos querÃ©is y nosotros a vosotros mÃ¡s aun!!! Nos vemos en el gran dÃa, quÃ© ganas tengo de veros a todos cuando llegue a la iglesia vestida de princesa!!!! Besazos!!!! Jejee!!
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