Yes~! This fluid image lives and moves with satisfying mystery. We understand the fog. We have had our own fogs. And for those of us who enjoy the layers of fog we are sometimes given in our natural wild worlds, this is home. Thank you.
Good point, Alan! It is true that most haiku publications shun overt metaphor, and this is more metaphorical than most haiku. But I like it because the imagery is so vivid.
June 25th, 2010 at 9:32 pm
I love the picture this paints in my mind. Thank you.
June 26th, 2010 at 3:34 am
Good one, James!
June 26th, 2010 at 9:26 am
Yes~! This fluid image lives and moves with satisfying mystery. We understand the fog. We have had our own fogs. And for those of us who enjoy the layers of fog we are sometimes given in our natural wild worlds, this is home. Thank you.
June 26th, 2010 at 5:57 pm
térképvázlat a ködből
őkőrszem- és poszátaének
jelzi a fák helyét
June 26th, 2010 at 3:18 pm
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June 26th, 2010 at 11:54 pm
Maps for them and maps for us. What a wonderful haiku! Thank you.
June 27th, 2010 at 12:08 am
Love the idea of singing maps. Beautiful!
June 27th, 2010 at 2:23 am
James, very clever haiku and even in pattern 5-7-5, congrats! Michael Lee Johnson, poet IL.
June 28th, 2010 at 10:30 am
enjoyed the metaphor – often outlawed in haiku mags! – Mark
June 29th, 2010 at 4:51 am
Thanks for the kind comments, everyone.
July 3rd, 2010 at 10:00 am
Nice haiku with natural 5-7-5 form rather than forced syntax and hanging participles etc…
BTW no haiku magazine would outlaw metaphor as many haiku often become metaphoric by default. ;-)
July 3rd, 2010 at 4:00 pm
Good point, Alan! It is true that most haiku publications shun overt metaphor, and this is more metaphorical than most haiku. But I like it because the imagery is so vivid.
May 26th, 2016 at 9:49 pm
Chicos muchas gracias por los co!ietarnos!!m! Como nos queréis y nosotros a vosotros más aun!!! Nos vemos en el gran dÃa, qué ganas tengo de veros a todos cuando llegue a la iglesia vestida de princesa!!!! Besazos!!!! Jejee!!