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recession    rising    from    the    factory    stacks    five    small    black

12 Responses

  1. Christopher Pickslay Says:

    unpredictable

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    the banker consoles himself

  2. FoundingEditor Says:

    Lovely, this is a wonderful poem, Ed! – Raquel Bailey

  3. Yvonne Cabalona Says:

    You've done it again, Ed. Great visual!!

  4. Kathe L. Palka Says:

    Great topical poem! The concrete aspect of the five birds in flight is perfect. Too bad it doesn't come through in the emailed version.

  5. Carlos Colon Says:

    Fabulous concrete haiku. Thanks for sharing, Ed. – C2

  6. Alan Summers Says:

    Good current concrete poem/haiku! ;-)

    Alan, With Words

  7. poetrymanusa Says:

    Ed! I loved this poem whatever form it is. Great imagination, feel free to send some of your works to me-I run 4 poetry websites. Michael Lee Johnson, Itasca, IL. http://poetryman.mysite.com/ promomanusa@gmail.com.

  8. Lynne Rees Says:

    Hi Ed – wonderful haiku.

  9. martin1223 Says:

    Great haiku! It's visually stunning .with a depressing theme. You and David Lean.

  10. chrispix Says:

    unpredictable
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    the banker consoles himself

  11. expatinCAT Says:

    recession blues….

    Echoes of a
    suburban dream
    bounce off a forest
    of
    foreclosure signs.

  12. Sam Sutlive Says:

    I really like this and the imagery is really good.-Sam Sutlive.

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