rumors of war
I pull the dandelions
more gently

 

 

 

(Originally published in The Fifteenth Annual Ukiah Haiku Festival, 1st Place, 2017)


5 Responses

  1. Gaby Bedetti Says:

    I like the concreteness of the speaker's adjustment and the emphasis on the "r"s in the first line.

  2. Pravat Says:

    An interesting haiku with an urge for peace and prosperity of nature. The reference to dandelions embarks on a beautiful textural density.

    A new dawn–
    the bud blossoms in
    war field solitude

    Pravat Kumar Padhy
    Publication Credit: Asahi Haiku Network, January 3, 2014

  3. pedometergeek Says:

    Perfect haiku for Memorial Day. Love it.

    red poppies
    cover the field
    once covered in blood

    nancy brady 5/28/18

  4. Anitha Varma Says:

    The gentleness and lightness of dandelions juxtaposes with something so serious a thing as a war and the contrast generates an electricity. Glad to.have read this.

    Anitha Varma.

  5. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    We tend to yank dandelions from the lawn as we see them as a nuisance, so the narrator's change to a gentle pulling is thought-provoking.

    marion

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