sea shells
a child’s summer
packed in a jar

—

Issue 18.1 | 25 May 2018

13 Responses

  1. Gaby Bedetti Says:
    May 25th, 2018 at 1:45 pm

    I like the lightness of the first two lines and the density of the last one.

  2. Dan Curtis Says:
    May 25th, 2018 at 2:12 pm

    Thank you, Gaby. Appreciate you comments.

  3. MaryJo Says:
    May 25th, 2018 at 1:58 pm

    I enjoyed your haiku very much. It zipped me right back to childhood, and Gaby's comment above is spot on.

  4. Dan Curtis Says:
    May 25th, 2018 at 2:11 pm

    Thank you, MaryJo, glad you enjoyed it!

  5. Kala Ramesh Says:
    May 25th, 2018 at 2:05 pm

    Much enjoyed. Nicely done, Dan.

  6. Dan Curtis Says:
    May 26th, 2018 at 7:52 am

    Thank you, Kala!

  7. Pravat Says:
    May 25th, 2018 at 6:06 pm

    A beautiful haiku with the touch of lightness (karumi).

    tiny shells–
    kids carry home
    the joy of sea

    Pravat Kumar Padhy
    Publication Credit: A Handful of Stones 16.1.2013

    *****
    the kids play and dance
    under the twilight sky
    counting the waves
    and counting the stars
    return with a pocketful of shells

    Pravat Kumar Padhy
    Publication Credit: Presence #60 , 2018

  8. Dan Curtis Says:
    May 28th, 2018 at 11:21 am

    Thank you, Pravat! And thank you for sharing two of your poems. They are lovely.

  9. janewilliams Says:
    May 26th, 2018 at 5:23 pm

    Lovely haiku, refreshing and evocative. Mary Jo and Gaby's thoughts also mirror my own.

    collecting shells
    a child's-eye view
    of wealth

  10. Dan Curtis Says:
    May 28th, 2018 at 11:20 am

    Thank you, Jane!

  11. sanjuktaa Says:
    May 29th, 2018 at 7:15 am

    Lovely!

  12. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:
    May 30th, 2018 at 9:55 am

    Oh, this brings me back! Thanks for the memory, Dan. Nicely done. :)

    marion

  13. agnesevasavich Says:
    June 1st, 2018 at 12:36 pm

    so cute! I have two little jars from a past summer at the beach :)

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