rumors of war I pull the dandelions more gently
(Originally published in The Fifteenth Annual Ukiah Haiku Festival, 1st Place, 2017)
—Cherese Cobb
Issue 18.1 | 28 May 2018
I like the concreteness of the speaker's adjustment and the emphasis on the "r"s in the first line.
An interesting haiku with an urge for peace and prosperity of nature. The reference to dandelions embarks on a beautiful textural density.
A new dawn– the bud blossoms in war field solitude
Pravat Kumar Padhy Publication Credit: Asahi Haiku Network, January 3, 2014
Perfect haiku for Memorial Day. Love it.
red poppies cover the field once covered in blood
nancy brady 5/28/18
The gentleness and lightness of dandelions juxtaposes with something so serious a thing as a war and the contrast generates an electricity. Glad to.have read this.
Anitha Varma.
We tend to yank dandelions from the lawn as we see them as a nuisance, so the narrator's change to a gentle pulling is thought-provoking.
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May 28th, 2018 at 10:18 am
I like the concreteness of the speaker's adjustment and the emphasis on the "r"s in the first line.
May 28th, 2018 at 8:08 pm
An interesting haiku with an urge for peace and prosperity of nature. The reference to dandelions embarks on a beautiful textural density.
A new dawn–
the bud blossoms in
war field solitude
Pravat Kumar Padhy
Publication Credit: Asahi Haiku Network, January 3, 2014
May 28th, 2018 at 8:23 pm
Perfect haiku for Memorial Day. Love it.
red poppies
cover the field
once covered in blood
nancy brady 5/28/18
May 28th, 2018 at 9:36 pm
The gentleness and lightness of dandelions juxtaposes with something so serious a thing as a war and the contrast generates an electricity. Glad to.have read this.
Anitha Varma.
May 30th, 2018 at 9:54 am
We tend to yank dandelions from the lawn as we see them as a nuisance, so the narrator's change to a gentle pulling is thought-provoking.
marion