our back and forth
the icicle lengthens
drop by drop


5 Responses

  1. Gaby Bedetti Says:

    great example of showing and not telling

  2. Debbi Antebi Says:

    Thank you, Gaby!

  3. Magyar Says:

    Grand, Debbi_! So many icicles in our lives.
    __ This, is my humble but complementary echo from… 5 March of 2009, 'twas actually the close of a previous "note-book" haibun.

    one drop lingers
    at winter's last icicle
    a candle flame

  4. Debbi Antebi Says:

    Lovely, thanks for sharing your haiku!

  5. Pravat Says:

    Beautifully portrayed.

    musical whisper
    the icicles soften
    the evening

    Pravat Kumar Padhy
    Publication Credit: Haikuuniverse 8.9.2017

    drop by drop–
    the stillness of the
    flowing sound

    Pravat Kumar Padhy
    Publication Credit: World Haiku Review, June 2015

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