oooooh I love the surprise in this one!… and the switch of attention… to the means: not the viewed ( fall migration) of birds…but the viewer(s) (lovely use of) (flock/ of binoculars)… dylan's poem does that too, the pointer getting all the attention of the child's eye…
December 10th, 2009 at 11:34 am
eclipse — the child staring at the astronomer's laser pointer
December 10th, 2009 at 12:11 pm
ha!
December 10th, 2009 at 2:18 pm
Oh, I really enjoyed this one. Thank you for sharing!
December 10th, 2009 at 3:07 pm
Excellent!
peace and love
December 10th, 2009 at 4:01 pm
Well executed haiku with a fine edge of haikai humour. ;-)
Alan
http://area17.blogspot.com
December 10th, 2009 at 5:26 pm
Excellent. Straightforward, yet inside-out in true haiku spirit.
December 10th, 2009 at 9:57 pm
oooooh I love the surprise in this one!… and the switch of attention… to the means: not the viewed ( fall migration) of birds…but the viewer(s) (lovely use of) (flock/ of binoculars)… dylan's poem does that too, the pointer getting all the attention of the child's eye…
December 11th, 2009 at 10:28 am
Deborah,
Through this and your activity on Facebook I am getting a new appreciation of your haiku work! Thank you!
December 11th, 2009 at 6:28 pm
Deborah,
Through this and your activity on Facebook I am getting a new appreciation of your haiku work! Thank you!