I love it, it evokes the the smell of exhaust fumes, the sounds of motors and coins, the flash of Christmas lights, the whoosh of Truckers' air brakes, the feeling of we're getting home for Christmas. Thank you.
I love that many of the readers felt their palms tingle with this poem… what could be better to indicate capturing the moment… the significance of a cold night in this season and the warmth exchanged out the window!… (it is possible to read this a different way… the passing of coins to the driver's hand (hers) in the front seat from the passenger seat…to be put into the toll booth slot… etc…(so passed between lovers inside the car) but I think the other image from the car to the coin~taker (so the warmth of the season exchanged to a stranger even in the most ordinary circumstances) may be the main intention, both are meaningful to me… and the possibilities suggests how wonderful this little poem is…
I love that many of the readers felt their palms tingle with this poem… what could be better to indicate capturing the moment… the significance of a cold night in this season and the warmth exchanged out the window!… (it is possible to read this a different way… the passing of coins to the driver's hand (hers) in the front seat from the passenger seat…to be put into the toll booth slot… etc…(so passed between lovers inside the car) but I think the other image from the car to the coin~taker (so the warmth of the season exchanged to a stranger even in the most ordinary circumstances) may be the main intention, both are meaningful to me… and the possibilities suggests how wonderful this little poem is…
December 24th, 2009 at 2:51 pm
nice. I can feel it.
December 24th, 2009 at 3:12 pm
Not bad.
December 24th, 2009 at 3:13 pm
.In fact quite good – I have no comparison for this that comes readily to mind. Well done!
December 24th, 2009 at 4:20 pm
I can't do against ist, I must translate:
d?jkapu d?sze
feny? ? k?zmeleg apr?t
ny?jtok a l?nynak
December 24th, 2009 at 9:41 pm
My palm tingled when I read it. Good work!
December 25th, 2009 at 4:20 am
Dear Michael, What a great Christmas poem! Thank you.
December 25th, 2009 at 9:08 am
I love it, it evokes the the smell of exhaust fumes, the sounds of motors and coins, the flash of Christmas lights, the whoosh of Truckers' air brakes, the feeling of we're getting home for Christmas. Thank you.
December 25th, 2009 at 5:16 pm
warm change means so very much this time of year…Thanks, Michael.
December 26th, 2009 at 4:45 pm
Lovely sentiment, Michael.
December 27th, 2009 at 6:39 pm
I love that many of the readers felt their palms tingle with this poem… what could be better to indicate capturing the moment… the significance of a cold night in this season and the warmth exchanged out the window!… (it is possible to read this a different way… the passing of coins to the driver's hand (hers) in the front seat from the passenger seat…to be put into the toll booth slot… etc…(so passed between lovers inside the car) but I think the other image from the car to the coin~taker (so the warmth of the season exchanged to a stranger even in the most ordinary circumstances) may be the main intention, both are meaningful to me… and the possibilities suggests how wonderful this little poem is…
December 28th, 2009 at 2:39 am
I love that many of the readers felt their palms tingle with this poem… what could be better to indicate capturing the moment… the significance of a cold night in this season and the warmth exchanged out the window!… (it is possible to read this a different way… the passing of coins to the driver's hand (hers) in the front seat from the passenger seat…to be put into the toll booth slot… etc…(so passed between lovers inside the car) but I think the other image from the car to the coin~taker (so the warmth of the season exchanged to a stranger even in the most ordinary circumstances) may be the main intention, both are meaningful to me… and the possibilities suggests how wonderful this little poem is…
February 23rd, 2010 at 7:03 pm
Thanks for all the comments here. For more discussion on this poem, you might want to visit the Haiku Foundation blog site at http://www.thehaikufoundation.org/2010/02/04/viral-5-5/.
Michael