Grey dawn
climbs the sky
bird over bird.

6 Responses

  1. Kala Ramesh Says:

    I really like your haiku poem, Jean.
    Great imagery

  2. Helen Buckingham Says:

    Simple, in the best sense. Lovely. (I'd ditch the full stop though!)

  3. GennadyNov41 Says:

    Simple and well!!

    Game with the sky –
    Single combat of a bird
    Through a head wind

  4. Jean Says:

    Helen, you're right – now i see it here, I wish I'd left out the capital and the full stop!

  5. Melinda Says:

    The phrase "bird over bird" is especially beautiful for me:
    bird over bird
    hand over hand
    up and away!
    … this reader goes for today.

  6. Frances Ruth Harris Says:

    Thank you for this flowing image. I like it to the max!

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