he thinks again of turning leaves her hands
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Angie Werren
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thoughts of turning leaves her hand on his
thanks, marie.
to me, the 'on his' takes away the play on the word 'leaves….'
Yes, I have eliminated the subject for "thoughts". The "on' is her plea not to leave or just to comfort during this season of turning. Yours does open up many more possibilities….
Congrats Angie!
thank you, myron!
;)
autumn dusk
the red haired boy twirls
with the leaves
lovely