winter dream? the pond’s breath trapped in ice
—Susan Murata
Issue 13.1 | 28 February 2013
Highly memorable and atmospheric.
Alan
Lovely, sharp.
This one made me feel quite breathless!
Beautiful haiku!
You really captured the cold in this one!!
i like this very much…well done
winter dream… the toddler's snowman slowly recedes
I love this but wonder at the placement of "trapped" in the second line instead of as part of the third line. the images are striking and fresh and the thoughts come alive. very nice.
Vivid image, so poetic.
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February 28th, 2013 at 4:11 pm
Highly memorable and atmospheric.
Alan
February 28th, 2013 at 6:53 pm
Lovely, sharp.
February 28th, 2013 at 4:19 pm
This one made me feel quite breathless!
March 1st, 2013 at 12:56 am
Beautiful haiku!
March 1st, 2013 at 2:38 am
You really captured the cold in this one!!
March 1st, 2013 at 5:57 am
i like this very much…well done
winter dream…
the toddler's snowman
slowly recedes
March 1st, 2013 at 7:17 am
I love this but wonder at the placement of "trapped" in the second line instead of as part of the third line. the images are striking and fresh and the thoughts come alive. very nice.
March 1st, 2013 at 11:33 am
Vivid image, so poetic.
August 11th, 2014 at 6:27 am
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