winter dream? the pond’s breath trapped in ice Published by Susan Murata i write small View all posts by Susan Murata
I love this but wonder at the placement of "trapped" in the second line instead of as part of the third line. the images are striking and fresh and the thoughts come alive. very nice. Reply
Highly memorable and atmospheric.
Alan
Lovely, sharp.
This one made me feel quite breathless!
Beautiful haiku!
You really captured the cold in this one!!
i like this very much…well done
winter dream…
the toddler's snowman
slowly recedes
I love this but wonder at the placement of "trapped" in the second line instead of as part of the third line. the images are striking and fresh and the thoughts come alive. very nice.
Vivid image, so poetic.
like this