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15 Responses

1. Ellen Grace Olinger Says:
   August 28th, 2013 at 11:05 am

   Dear Ramesh Anand,

   An excellent poem, with great emotion expressed so well.

   I wrote this a few years after my mother's passing:

   taking turns
   letting each other go
   only to learn again
   how love grows,
   Mother

   Ellen
   (Bell's Letters Poet, No. 115, Jan. 2006)

2. Ramesh Anand Says:
   August 29th, 2013 at 1:06 am

   Ellen, Thanks for the appreciation. I like your tanka very much. Emotion brought out effortlessly.

3. Marie Shimane Says:
   August 28th, 2013 at 1:31 pm

   Deeply touching. When my stepdaughter died eight years ago, I wrote this:

   another July
   no new memories to add
   living on the old

4. Ramesh Anand Says:
   August 29th, 2013 at 1:04 am

   Marie, thanks for the response and for sharing the common feeling through a wonderfully creafted ku. deeply touching too.

5. kalaramesh Says:
   August 28th, 2013 at 6:51 pm

   Well done, Ramesh.
   I love your Ls 4 & 5
   _kala

6. Ramesh Anand Says:
   August 29th, 2013 at 1:00 am

   Thanks a lot, Kala.
   Your continous voice to keep L5 strong in a tanka in IN haiku forum has helped me a lot!

7. Alan Summers Says:
   August 28th, 2013 at 10:56 pm

   Love the lines, and pauses:

   with my child
   on my shoulder, I walk
   in the long rain
   carrying the heaviness
   of shattered dreams

   —Ramesh Anand

8. Ramesh Anand Says:
   August 29th, 2013 at 12:56 am

   Thanks Alan for the appreciation.

9. AnithaVarma Says:
   August 29th, 2013 at 12:50 am

   Way to go, Ramesh..

10. Ramesh Anand Says:
    August 29th, 2013 at 5:42 am

    Thanks Anitha for the encouragement.

11. sanjuktaa Says:
    August 29th, 2013 at 2:54 am

    Beautiful tanka, Ramesh! Well done!

12. Ramesh Anand Says:
    August 29th, 2013 at 5:43 am

    Thanks Sanjuktaa for your beautiful response. It is feeling nice to have so much great responses.

13. Pravat Says:
    August 29th, 2013 at 7:11 pm

    Nicely textured poem!

14. Ramesh Anand Says:
    August 29th, 2013 at 8:30 pm

    Thanks Pravat Sir for the appreciation.

15. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:
    August 30th, 2013 at 12:37 am

    Like Kala, I love lines 4 & 5, Ramesh.

    Also, for me, the point where this evolves from being a description of a parent simply carrying a sleepy child and moves towards a moment of sadness is L3

    'in the long rain'

    I think the use of 'long' is effective here as a turning point. And then the end is heartbreaking.

    marion

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