with my child
on my?shoulder, I walk
in the long rain
carrying the heaviness
of shattered dreams
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Ramesh Anand
Ramesh Anand is a manager from Bangalore, India. He works for Philips healthcare as a manufacturing test strategist. His haiku, tanka and haiga have appeared in 15 countries and translated to 8 foreign languages. He released his first book of haiku poetry in 2012 called Newborn Smiles, published by Cyberwit. Akita Sakigake Shimpo President Award, Honorable mention in International Matsuo Bash? Award, Dr. Sandeep Chauhan Commendable Prize by RLP Award 2013 are his latest awards. He blogs at http://ramesh-inflame.blogspot.com/
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Dear Ramesh Anand,
An excellent poem, with great emotion expressed so well.
I wrote this a few years after my mother's passing:
taking turns
letting each other go
only to learn again
how love grows,
Mother
Also, for me, the point where this evolves from being a description of a parent simply carrying a sleepy child and moves towards a moment of sadness is L3
'in the long rain'
I think the use of 'long' is effective here as a turning point. And then the end is heartbreaking.
Dear Ramesh Anand,
An excellent poem, with great emotion expressed so well.
I wrote this a few years after my mother's passing:
taking turns
letting each other go
only to learn again
how love grows,
Mother
Ellen
(Bell's Letters Poet, No. 115, Jan. 2006)
Ellen, Thanks for the appreciation. I like your tanka very much. Emotion brought out effortlessly.
Deeply touching. When my stepdaughter died eight years ago, I wrote this:
another July
no new memories to add
living on the old
Marie, thanks for the response and for sharing the common feeling through a wonderfully creafted ku. deeply touching too.
Well done, Ramesh.
I love your Ls 4 & 5
_kala
Thanks a lot, Kala.
Your continous voice to keep L5 strong in a tanka in IN haiku forum has helped me a lot!
Love the lines, and pauses:
with my child
on my shoulder, I walk
in the long rain
carrying the heaviness
of shattered dreams
—Ramesh Anand
Thanks Alan for the appreciation.
Way to go, Ramesh..
Thanks Anitha for the encouragement.
Beautiful tanka, Ramesh! Well done!
Thanks Sanjuktaa for your beautiful response. It is feeling nice to have so much great responses.
Nicely textured poem!
Thanks Pravat Sir for the appreciation.
Like Kala, I love lines 4 & 5, Ramesh.
Also, for me, the point where this evolves from being a description of a parent simply carrying a sleepy child and moves towards a moment of sadness is L3
'in the long rain'
I think the use of 'long' is effective here as a turning point. And then the end is heartbreaking.
marion