thunderclap? the past tense he uses to describe me
—Margaret Dornaus
Issue 14.2 | 25 September 2014
Margaret. Very nice, very strong, very smart. Thank you.— Jim Delay
so many storms but this is our last one
Oooh – nasty, nasty! I like this one a lot :)
marion
Very inspirational, thanks :)
Ouch!
So for once he gets his grammar correct, with the worse result.
Neat haiku!
warm regards,
Alan
Powerful haiku, Margaret. I am particularly struck by the poignancy in your choice of "uses" – a continuing present tense form – deliberately declining yourself to employ the past tense. Very moving work, and very raw.
Thank you for sharing it.
Strider
From "thunderclap" to the last word, yes, ouch! Skillfully written: "the past tense he uses"
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September 25th, 2014 at 10:27 am
Margaret. Very nice, very strong, very smart. Thank you.— Jim Delay
September 25th, 2014 at 2:10 pm
so many storms
but this
is our last one
September 26th, 2014 at 2:32 am
Oooh – nasty, nasty! I like this one a lot :)
marion
September 26th, 2014 at 10:25 am
Very inspirational, thanks :)
September 26th, 2014 at 3:19 pm
Ouch!
So for once he gets his grammar correct, with the worse result.
Neat haiku!
warm regards,
Alan
September 26th, 2014 at 4:54 pm
Powerful haiku, Margaret. I am particularly struck by the poignancy in your choice of "uses" – a continuing present tense form – deliberately declining yourself to employ the past tense.
Very moving work, and very raw.
Thank you for sharing it.
Strider
October 8th, 2014 at 7:36 am
From "thunderclap" to the last word, yes, ouch!
Skillfully written: "the past tense he uses"