first drizzle ... all that was left unsaid in your eyes

     first drizzle ...
 all that was left unsaid
      in your eyes

10 Responses

  1. Alan Summers Says:

    first drizzle …
    all that was left unsaid
    in your eyes


    So many romantic early 20th Century movies come to mind. Light rain, and an unresolved romance.


  2. kalaramesh Says:

    Each line unfolding into the next . . .
    Absolutely lovely, Shloka!

    Nicely done.

  3. harrisfr Says:

    Love engages a new dimension with each tear.

  4. haikuapprentice Says:

    Shloka, this is really lovely – and a beautiful matching haiga. I love the subtlety, and how contained the emotions are – the welling tears are simply a drizzle, not a storm or shower. And the raindrop captured in the accompanying photo is reflecting, making me suspect the wet eyes are those of the poet herself. But of course, not all tears are sad. Sometimes a drop of water is like a jewel, sparkling and adding to the beauty of the setting – like the raindrop on the flower. So what is being unsaid? I suspect the full extent of love and perfection. And it is crystallized into one small drop of jeweled beauty.

    Thanks for joining us on Tinywords, Shloka. I hope to read more of your work here.
    And thank you for sharing this gem with us.


  5. Kumarendra Mallick Says:

    Wonderful feeling one gets after reading this very romantic poem. Thank you, Shloka.

  6. Heather Butler Says:

    Such a marvellously evocative haiku … poignant, yet enigmatic! The words loaded onto my screen before the image. I was thoroughly entranced by the words alone and then the image appeared with its "tearful" yet very bright tones, overlaying the sense of sadness I felt with a tissue of optimism. I can bring many interpretations to this work and that intrigues me. I know that I will return to this page again and again. Congratulations on producing such wonderful art.!

  7. Gisele LeBlanc Says:

    Beautifully crafted and shaded in so many nuances. Very, very nice. :)

  8. Paul Heinowski Says:

    Yes I agree. Tears can be positive. They can come at beginnings as well as ends. They can be loving, even in the drizzle. Even when it is raining. Maybe even especially then.

  9. Pravat Says:

    Beautiful haiga! There is an aesthetic connection with the exhibition of surrounding nature. A haiku to be cherished for long!

  10. Doc Says:

    I’m so glad that the inentret allows free info like this!

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