thunderclap?
the past tense he uses
to describe me
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Margaret Dornaus
Margaret Dornaus holds an M.F.A. in literary translation from the University of Arkansas, where she received the Lily Peters Poetry Translation Award as well as being twice nominated for an Associated Writing Program essay-writing award. Winner of the Tanka Society of America?s 2011 International Tanka Contest, her tanka, haiku and haibun have appeared in numerous anthologies and journals, including: A Hundred Gourds; Atlas Poetica; Modern Haiku; Moonbathing; red lights; Ribbons; and others. Her first book of poems, Prayer for the Dead: Collected Haibun & Tanka Prose, received a 2017 Merit Book Award from the Haiku Society of America. View all posts by Margaret Dornaus
Margaret. Very nice, very strong, very smart. Thank you.— Jim Delay
so many storms
but this
is our last one
Oooh – nasty, nasty! I like this one a lot :)
marion
Very inspirational, thanks :)
Ouch!
So for once he gets his grammar correct, with the worse result.
Neat haiku!
warm regards,
Alan
Powerful haiku, Margaret. I am particularly struck by the poignancy in your choice of "uses" – a continuing present tense form – deliberately declining yourself to employ the past tense.
Very moving work, and very raw.
Thank you for sharing it.
Strider
From "thunderclap" to the last word, yes, ouch!
Skillfully written: "the past tense he uses"