thanksgiving leftovers all the things we didn’t say
—Sondra J. Byrnes
Issue 15.1 | 12 May 2015
…..and all the things we did.
family lunch: tucking into the marrow
(Presence, Winter 2009)
I recognize the moment, and I like your "leftovers." Could "we" be moved to line 3? I think that arrangement sounds more like the human voice. Bill Kenney
Family dinners – either too much or too little is said …
Beautiful poem but I agree with Bill: "we" in line 3 sounds more like human voice…
I get the impression that because of 'leftovers', the word 'we' has been left hanging for artistic reasons .. and I like that.
marion
baby photos from my birth mother… how do I say hello to me
Alan Summers Publications credits: The Heron’s Nest (Vol XIV, No. 2: June, 2012)
That’s really thnkiing at a high level
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May 12th, 2015 at 9:45 am
…..and all the things we did.
family lunch:
tucking into
the marrow
(Presence, Winter 2009)
May 12th, 2015 at 9:51 am
I recognize the moment, and I like your "leftovers." Could "we" be moved to line 3? I think that arrangement sounds more like the human voice.
Bill Kenney
May 12th, 2015 at 10:19 am
Family dinners – either too much or too little is said …
May 12th, 2015 at 11:26 am
Beautiful poem but I agree with Bill: "we" in line 3 sounds more like human voice…
May 15th, 2015 at 1:09 pm
I get the impression that because of 'leftovers', the word 'we' has been left hanging for artistic reasons .. and I like that.
marion
May 27th, 2015 at 3:42 pm
baby photos
from my birth mother…
how do I say hello to me
Alan Summers
Publications credits: The Heron’s Nest (Vol XIV, No. 2: June, 2012)
October 25th, 2015 at 12:15 pm
That’s really thnkiing at a high level