all the things we
—Sondra J. Byrnes
Issue 15.1 | 12 May 2015
…..and all the things we did.
(Presence, Winter 2009)
I recognize the moment, and I like your "leftovers." Could "we" be moved to line 3? I think that arrangement sounds more like the human voice.
Family dinners – either too much or too little is said …
Beautiful poem but I agree with Bill: "we" in line 3 sounds more like human voice…
I get the impression that because of 'leftovers', the word 'we' has been left hanging for artistic reasons .. and I like that.
from my birth mother…
how do I say hello to me
Publications credits: The Heron’s Nest (Vol XIV, No. 2: June, 2012)
That’s really thnkiing at a high level
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