Outdoor wedding
the odor
of insect repellent

7 Responses

  1. Mike Schoenburg Says:

    ? your haiku poem.

    O – Off-putting

    M – Mosquito

    G – Garden !

    sunshine flows

    through the trees

    into me

  2. hammerandtongs Says:

    sunshine flows

    through the trees

    into me

    Lovely image. Liquid sunshine flowing into me.

  3. Magyar Says:

    __A welcome breeze.

    Shaded maples; a minister asks the question; two robins..

  4. Shrikaanth Krishnamurthy Says:

    Good one.

    wedding night…
    you bite my lips

  5. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Oh, no! As someone who gets eaten alive by mozzies every time I go abroad, this resonates with me, Carol :(


  6. haikuapprentice Says:

    Like some of the other commentators, this haiku really resonates with me, Carol. Mosquitos seem to target me, and their just perceptible buzzing can even seem to drown out party conversation.

    I really like the way your poem playfully captures this very human experience, and the fact that even our efforts to avoid mosquito misery can themselves still distract from our outdoor celebrations. I also love how not only does the poem subvert our expectations with the last line – the odour is not of flowers but the rather unappealing scent of insect repellent – but the very structure of the traditional haiku is inverted, with a long – short – long instead of the traditional short-long-short.

    Great poetry Carol. I look forward to reading more of your works in future.


  7. hammerandtongs Says:

    Wonderful poem.
    The unpredictability of life.
    "Outdoor wedding", graced, at least for the poet, not with the fragrance of flowers but the odor of insect repellent.

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