silently
across hard piano keys
a soft duster
the spring breeze feels its way
through old wind chimes
This is a tan renga, a form of linked verse, by Anna Maris and Marcus Liljedahl.
silently
across hard piano keys
a soft duster
the spring breeze feels its way
through old wind chimes
This is a tan renga, a form of linked verse, by Anna Maris and Marcus Liljedahl.
March 31st, 2016 at 9:46 am
Lovely images. Thank you for your word gifts.
March 31st, 2016 at 10:33 am
This is gorgeous.
March 31st, 2016 at 12:02 pm
Lovely, really enjoyed it!
March 31st, 2016 at 12:23 pm
Beautiful. I'm hearing the tones of the piano as my mother used the duster, and the chimes ringing in harmony. Thank you.
April 2nd, 2016 at 3:02 am
Wow, what a stunning effect!
I love the rich contrasts, which are both explicit and implied, and which embrace multiple senses, greatly enhancing the effect of this poem –
"hard" piano keys, "soft" duster
I see black and white on the keyboard
I hear allegro and adagio
There is silence now, but I cannot help but imagine the range of dynamics when the keyboard is at play
Finally, there is the delightful image of the spring breeze, "feeling its way" through the chimes. This is delightfully auditory, but I particularly love how the phrase "feeling its way" is an echo of how musicians frequently create their work.
A masterful composition by Anna and Marcus! Bravo!
I hope to enjoy more such collaborations in future.
Strider
April 4th, 2016 at 9:42 am
What beautiful images.
April 13th, 2016 at 5:42 am
A delightful collaboration!
marion
May 20th, 2016 at 7:57 pm
Lovely. The contrast between the spring breeze (new) and the old (wind chimes). The hard piano keys and the soft duster.
"The spring breeze feels its way", because it is a spring breeze, a zephyr, not a windstorm. Also read into it the gentleness of the breeze, because it is is careful of the OLD wind chimes.