rain puddling
in the hollow of a salt lick
the cow’s rough tongue

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Issue 16.2 | 18 November 2016

10 Responses

  1. Stanford M. Forrester Says:
    November 18th, 2016 at 4:20 pm

    Really a great poem. Don’t think this topic has been covered before.

  2. Joyce Lorenson Says:
    November 19th, 2016 at 11:14 am

    Thank you, Mr. Forrester, for your kind comment.

  3. Dirk van Nouhuys Says:
    November 18th, 2016 at 4:29 pm

    I happen to have tended salt licks. This is wonderfully sensuous.

  4. Joyce Lorenson Says:
    November 19th, 2016 at 11:18 am

    Thank you, Mr. van Nouhuys, for your praise and interesting comment. I have never heard of
    salt licks being tended.. perhaps on a wildlife reserve?

  5. Alan Summers Says:
    November 19th, 2016 at 6:35 am

    .
    Brilliant!

    rain puddling
    in the hollow of a salt lick
    the cow’s rough tongue

    —JOYCE JOSLIN LORENSON

    The closet to this subject on 'animals' obtaining minerals is this one which I judged for the World Monuments Haiku Contest of 2013:

    near the Wailing Wall
    butterflies drinking salt
    from the mud

    Third Prize: Mike Blottenberger
    Site: Wailing Wall

    .

    At first I read 'rain pudding' which was wonderfully evocative, and then realised it was the more concrete 'rain puddling' which made me realise the links between the two words. :-)

    Wonderfully written haiku, of a very high quality.

    warm regards,

    Alan

  6. Joyce Lorenson Says:
    November 19th, 2016 at 11:11 am

    Thank you ,Mr. Summers, such high praise from you is overwhelming!

  7. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:
    November 19th, 2016 at 2:55 pm

    So many senses at play here – really wonderful!

    marion

  8. Joyce Lorenson Says:
    November 20th, 2016 at 12:11 am

    Thank you, Marion, for your kind compliment.

  9. janewilliams Says:
    November 20th, 2016 at 5:18 pm

    Terrific juxtaposition, love it.

  10. Joyce Lorenson Says:
    November 23rd, 2016 at 4:42 am

    Thank you, Jane, for your kind compliment.

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