Issue 16.2 | 21 November 2016
Ahhh, our coincidental brews; contraries… face to face. Nifty_! _m
as this teapot screams
Such a unique poem, but oh so universal. Reminds me of one in my collection, cricket song.
the steam of the tea kettle
again and again
Thank you for your poem, and for inspiring conversation.
nice temperature contrast
same old argument
Ha! I read it as iced tea was having a cooling effect on a heated discussion in Ls 1&2 – 'tea cools/the conversation' so 'heats up' was a surprise in L3, then I realised the tea itself was growing cold because of an argument. Clever senryu :)
Ah, nothing like a brew (slang for tea) to help along conversations, even if the tea is soon forgotten. :-)
In this case the reverse has happened and the conversation boils while the tea goes cool to cold to stale. I hope it was only a storm in a teacup and did not escalate?
the cabbie’s last customer
smells of mint tea
n.b. The brass bell haiku journal did a brilliant series on Tea Haiku / Haiku Tea issue November 2014
I love the subtle use of contrast. beautiful
So simple, so perfect. A wonderful senryu, Joanne.
I love how the middle line interacts in different ways with the first and third. Thank you for this!
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